Describe an activity you did after school with friends
When the after school bell is ringing, it is sounds like angel voice I never heard that befoer. Of course my spirit feel flies like a bird. Every night form Monday to Sunday, there are lots of night markets in Tainan.
You can eat different delicious foods, seeing the good look clothes, playing game with your friends, most of all you can relax after a day's work in here.
After night market, we may be have a chat with something about what happened arround at our life where in 85 Degree Centigrade coffee shop or go to Holiday to singing song in Friday night....etc.
We have lots of activity after school. If you don't know what to do after class, I think I can give you some suggestions other tnan to staying at home to see the movies and watch TV. I think that is ok. So wish I have a good time every day.
posted by Bill @ 10:03 AM
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When the after bell is ringing, it is sound likes angel voice in my mind and I never heart that befoer.
-->school bell
-->it sounds like...
--> angel voice I've never heard before
Of course my spirit feel fly likes a bird.
-->my spirit flies like a bird.
Because form Monday to Sunday, there are lots of night markets in Tainan every night.
--> 'becuase +...' can not stand alone as a sentence. Combine this clause with the previous one.
You can eating different delicious foods, seeing the good look clothes, playing game with your friends, most of all you can relax after a day's work in here.
-->can eat...
After night market, we may be have a chat with something about what happened arround our life where in 85 Degree Centigrade coffee shop or go to Holiday to singing song in Friday night....etc.
-->around at...
We have lots of activity after school. If you don't know what's thing to do after class, I think I can give you some suggest or you want to stay at home to see the movies and watch TV.
-->what to do ...some suggestions other than staying at home and ...
I think that is ok. So wish you have a good time every day.
-->You? Me? Who is the intended audience of your writing?
-->How about another type of ending? Maybe you can summarize all the activities mentioned and give us your final thought about these activities.
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